Silverchair - Emotion Sickness -

Should I expand on a or keep it as a shorter "vignette"?

Should the be more hopeful or remain dark and atmospheric? Silverchair - Emotion Sickness

He wasn’t sure. Time had become elastic. He’d spend four hours watching a single water droplet track down the windowpane, feeling a strange, hollow kinship with it. It was just gravity. It was just the way things went down. Should I expand on a or keep it as a shorter "vignette"